My sea poem
As the sea smashes,
And thumps when it crashes,
The fish still swim,
As I dive under water,
I see eel holes and a car rim,
So I get out so I can get my board,
I get in the water and oh lord,
I its a huge wave,
Right now I think I’m going to my grave,
This story is to be continued………
Bryce De Klerk 2018
Hi Bryce,
ReplyDeleteMy name is Freeman and I'm from Panmure Bridge School. I liked the powerful adjectives you used to describe the sea, But while I read your poem there was some misplaced words in random places.
Well Done and Keep up the great work!
Hi Bryce,
ReplyDeleteThis poem sounds really interesting. When I read this poem I felt so proud of all the rhyming words you used. I like the way you used rhyming words at the end of each sentence. This poem tells me that your wrote about the sea.
Superb work Bryce.
Hi Bryce, Joshua here from Panmure Bridge School.
ReplyDeleteYour poem sounds great. I also like how you were rhyming your poem so it can make sense. I also like how you were describing where your set was.
Great work
Joshua